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After fleeing from her mother at the charity ball, Dan persuades Vicky to confront Therese (Gem) at her hotel. The pain that Vicky feels is not just what happened the day before, but the buried pain of her childhood, when her parents abandoned her to the care of her grandmother (Mamie). It has all come flooding back. She describes her feelings to her mother.
You weren’t a mother to me, Therese, you were never a mother to me, Mamie was the only mother I had. And now, you have poisoned the relationship between the only decent man I have ever been with, a man I was beginning to love. How can I be with him now without thinking of you two together? And what about what you did to Dan? You had your fun with him when he was a student, and then you just ran out on him, with no apology or explanation. Did you ever consider that, Therese?”
I put my hand on her arm.
“It’s okay, Vicky.” I didn’t want her worrying about me when it was her we should be concerned about.
Tears were now streaming down her face and she made no move to wipe them away.Â
A lot of painful memories were revealed in this conversation, but obviously I cannot use them because of the ten line restriction. I will continue for a couple more weeks, and will then switch to another book. My latest novel is nearing its conclusion, but won’t be ready for a little while to share with you, so I may go to another of my past novels. I must write faster!
A Love More Precious Than Diamonds is now available from Blushing Books and Amazon US
Danny was a 21-year-old student when he met Gem in London in 1992. She was the most beautiful, sensuous and sexy woman he had ever met, and she was some years older and married to a wealthy businessman. So why did she pick him from all the men she might have chosen?
Their affair was brief and dramatic, and introduced Danny to sexual passion, the like of which he had never experienced before. It also introduced him to the kind of woman who desired control and discipline in her life. Even though the affair lasted just a few weeks, it changed his life and changed his perception of the type of woman he wanted.
Twenty years later he met a young woman and, for the first time in his life, he fell in love; but fate was not kind, and the events of twenty years earlier came back to haunt him as he realised that he might lose the woman of his dreams. He was powerless to act. He could not rewrite his life history.
Poor Vicky! I completely understand why she is so upset. I hope she can find an HEA with someone whether it’s Dan or not.
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Yes, she has a lot of trauma to work through. She will be OK though.
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Very interesting switch to Therese’s POV. You’ve really got me wondering how this can possibly work out.
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It’s Vicky’s POV really. Halfway through the book, after concentrating entirely on Dan’s POV I suddenly switch and go back to Vicky’s life before she met Dan. It got me into trouble with one reviewer, who only gave me one star because she didn’t like the sudden jump backwards in time. It disconcerted her, although other readers seemed to cope. As there is 15 years between Dan and Vicky, I thought it would be better if I concentrated on them one at a time, rather than keep jumping backwards and forwards. It also tests if the reader has fallen asleep!
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No sleeping here as I’m absorbed in your powerful unusual tale. Rachel, this is terrific.
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Thank you Charmaine. Very pleased to hear that.
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What a difficult situation and relationship. I love his tenderness and support. I hope he can heal this in some way.
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Yes, I do create some difficulties for my characters. I think he is in for the long haul.
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Poor Vicky. Hopefully confronting her mother about this will help her find peace.
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Shortly after her confrontation with her mother, I go back and tell Vicky’s story, and, yes, I think she will find peace, in the end.
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Sometimes the only way to move forward is to stop and face the past. I think you’ve grasped that well in this scene, Rachel. 🙂
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Thanks, Teresa. My characters seem to struggle before they are able to achieve their HEA!
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Evidently Mom wasn’t such a good mother.Poor Vicky.
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No, she liked the bright life, and the diamonds, but not so much the responsibility of being a mother.
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The sins of the past catch up with Mommy Dearest? Too bad about that 1 star review. Flashbacks can be disconcerting to some people. You can’t please everybody. Good luck.
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Thanks Diana. I’m used to the odd poor review now. One reader marked me down because I used too many big words!
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So sad. What pain – fabulously written. Tweeted.
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Thanks, Daryl.
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You and me both–with the wanting to write faster thing! Great scene here, very tense and dramatic.
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Thanks, Elizabeth.
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Powerful scene. Really well done. And don’t we all wish we could write faster? *sighs*
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Thanks, Amy.
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Such an interesting and unusual situation you’ve got going on here! I can’t help but wonder how it will all turn out. which a good sign! Enjoyed the excerpt, strong emotions!.
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Thank you, Veronica. I certainly do put my characters through an emotional roller coaster.
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Beautifully intense,Rachel
Excellent job
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Thank you very much, Kim.
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